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Trevor Millum, Teachit poet in residenceThe aim of the blog is to try to show the process of writing. It's a bit artificial because you can't reproduce all the thoughts and crossings out that take place either metaphorically or literally.   

However, it might help to show students that poems do not spring fully-formed onto the page. 

Previous blogs are archived: see the list at the right of the page.  Quite a few have been inspired by existing poems (by Edward Thomas, Duffy, Heaney, Armitage and others) and there are also villanelles, sonnets and lots of light verse.  I enjoy this - and it keeps me writing!  Any comments welcome.

 

Shall I?

Sunday, 22 May 2016 15:07:21

Sunday, 22 May 2016 15:07:21

Sometimes too hot the lines of Shakespeare shine

And often is his exact meaning dimmed
For even geniuses sometimes decline
By chance or else their mastery is trimmed.

But you are a tome of quite a different style
For though there's subtleties what you say
you do not seek to hide your sense away
or disguise with metaphor or words of guile

I thin trimmed will work but the line might need some tweaking.  Happy with sense - exactly what I mean. I think subtleties will be ok; I may have to see if I get used to it.

I have thoughts about the closing couplet and will work on those now. 



Shall I?

Friday, 20 May 2016 10:04:34

Friday, 20 May 2016 10:04:34

My previous entry seems to have disappeared!  In the meantime I had worked out the structure of the next four lines, but unsure of the two key words.

Shall I compare thee to a sonnet by the Bard?
Thou art more straightforward, easier to read.
His construction doth make reading hard
And we don’t have all the time that we might need.

Sometimes too hot the lines of Shakespeare shine
And often is his exact meaning dimmed
For even geniuses sometimes decline
By chance....

But you are a tome of quite a different style
For though there's .................in what you say
you do not seek to hide your  ............. away
or disguise with metaphor or words of guile

 



Shall I?

Sunday, 8 May 2016 19:37:22

Sunday, 8 May 2016 19:37:22

Working on the next lines

Sometimes too hot the lines of Shakespeare shine

And often is his exact meaning dimmed

And even geniuses sometimes decline

By chance or.....

OK - time for a review.

I shall be away at a poet's 'retreat' this week - so no internet but maybe lots of writing!

 



Shall I compare thee...

Wednesday, 4 May 2016 12:44:59

Wednesday, 4 May 2016 12:44:59

Aftr much thought and some interruptions, I decided to compare the imaginary object of my affections to one of Shakespeare's sonnets? A challenge, but kind of appropriate. Here's my starter: 

Shall I compare thee to a sonnet by the Bard?
Thou art more straightforward, easier to read.
His construction doth make reading hard
And we do not have all the time we need.



...and thought about the weather...

Monday, 25 April 2016 14:05:40

Monday, 25 April 2016 14:05:40

...and the rough winds which were shaking the darling buds of April...

and so, as we're into everything Shakespearian at the moment, maybe it's time for a parody of one of the Bard's sonnets.

Here's the most famous:

Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day?
Thou art more lovely and more temperate.
Rough winds do shake the darling buds of May,
And summer’s lease hath all too short a date.
Sometime too hot the eye of heaven shines,
And often is his gold complexion dimmed;
And every fair from fair sometime declines,
By chance, or nature’s changing course, untrimmed;
But thy eternal summer shall not fade,
Nor lose possession of that fair thou ow’st,
Nor shall death brag thou wand’rest in his shade,
When in eternal lines to Time thou grow’st.
     So long as men can breathe, or eyes can see,
     So long lives this, and this gives life to thee.

So, what shall we compare you to?  A pot of tea? A book of verse? A vase of flowers?  A racing car?  Depends on the recipient, of course.

I'll have a think about both the recipient and the comparison.

 

 



Looking for inspiration, I reached for my camera

Thursday, 21 April 2016 12:33:41

Thursday, 21 April 2016 12:33:41
Looking for inspiration, I reached for my camera and took a walk around the garden.  I think there will be something in one of the images.   We'll see...


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