So I did try it out with some students at Brumby school. They were great and seemed to like it - so, apart from a few tweaks, I'll probably leave it much as it is and then come back to it in a few week's time and see if I still like it.  Needs to be read pretty fast. 

I put all the lines that  made couplets of collections - verses, even - onto a big sheet and (a) moved them around and (b) prioritised them - putting the ones I was least happy with at the bottom. Then tried to see connections and tied the various parts back together.

Bring on the subs
bring on the wraps
Sandwiches and
Bacon baps
Chocolate cookies
Ginger snaps
In your stomach
Fill those gaps 
Fairy cakes
Fresh home bakes
Sausage rolls
Keep body and soul
Together while
You relish the taste
Of custard cream
and almond paste        
Cinnamon whirls
Gingerbread men
and gingerbread girls
with icing lips
and chocolate curls
inches on hips
and jam on my face
All those pastries
Add to your waist
Easy to see
How calories
Can pile up quick
Better stick
To that French stick
Or maybe get
A long baguette
 I'm going through a phase
of mayonnaise
 / on everything
 / drips off my chin
 / don't ever think
 / I'll be thin again...  
In the meantime though
I need some dough
So give me
Give me a sub
Give me a wrap
Give me a sandwich
Or a bacon bap

Repetition at the end?  I'll try it out tomorrow.

Fairy cakes
Fresh home bakes
Sausage rolls
Keep body and soul
Together while
You ..... the taste
Of ................
and almond paste

Cinnamon whirls
Gingerbread men
and gingerbread girls
with icing lips
and chocolate curls
inches on hips
and --

Am I going to list everything ever sold in a baker's shop or is it time to call a halt?   I think it's time to consolidate.  Which means getting all these lines and spreading them out on a big sheet of paper. Unfortunately I can't do that in this blogospot.
 

Not sure where this is going.  It could go on for quite a while, especially if I keep coming up with other edibles from the baker's shop

Chocolate cookies
Ginger snaps
In your stomach
Fill those gaps

A big bread bun
Full of (what? - cheese?  ham? tuna mayonnaise?)

Why do you get beef sandwiches, ham sandwiches but never lamb sandwiches? Cold lamb is delicious, too. 

In a rap like this you do have to think of rhymes - or at least near rhymes. Tuna doesn't sound rich in rhymes but ham, cheese, even mayonnaise have possibilities.  End that malaise with mayonnaise!  I'm going through a phase of mayonnaise / on everything / drips off my chin / don't ever think / I'll be thin again...     Hard to stop once you're started.

Being in France made buns and wraps give way to croissants and baguettes.

Don't forget
Your long baguette
or
Pick and mix
a long French stick

And...en passant
A chocolate croissant?

(Well, why not? Let's get MFL on board too.)

All those pastries
Add to your waist
Easy to see
How calories
Can pile up quick
Better stick
To that French stick!

Just a few starting points...

Bring on the subs
bring on the wraps
Sandwiches and
Bacon baps

Healthy options
Not our style
Do we want salad?
No way!

Pull up a seat
Rest your feet
Give yourself
A chocolate treat

Rest your legs
Rest your back
Give yourself
A deep fry snack

Off to Normandy for a few days.  Just think about those pastries...

Musing - there's a strange word. If you heard one of your pupils using it 'using musing'  you'd be surprised, I think.  In my mind, connected to the Muse or muse, hence the title I've used very often for talks and books and websites: the Mouse and the Muse.  Anyway, musing on words you pick up as you mosey about.  (To move along gently, says Chambers, but also, alternatively, to hurry. Words! - you can't pin them down).   Anyway, moseying along musing, I came across subs and wraps -  on signs in a fast food shop window. My 1980s Chambers doesn't have wrap as a noun and sub is a prefix unless slang for submarine or a loan.  However, it does have bap and, of course, bun.

These words are fun and pupils usually enjoy playing with them.  They yearn for rhymes and rhythms and word play.  The shop in question was already playing with words with this pun:  bring on the subs!  Then there's 'it's a wrap' or Wrap Music.  and so on. 

Subs and wraps, sandwiches and baps.  There must be a little rhyme/rap/song/ chant here, surely?