The first thing is to cut away where possible:
in the woods
on the edge of fields
by the river
even a picnic spot
be still and silent...
birds approach, stop, sing, chase
a squirrel, small black, inquisitive
Something I worry about is - structure. Does this have any kind of structure or is it just a dribble of words onto the page. Some writers are happy with the dribble or the splurge, but it doesn't satisfy me...